This week we learnt about lyricism. I found this particularly interesting because its something I’ve been partaking in, and enjoying for a while now.
I personally disagree with requiring rhyme. I don’t like writing lyrics that rhyme a lot, as I see them to typically be, entry level and corny. Obviously in context though, In rap rhyme is crucial, and I really like it in this context.
Something I did take from this lecture though was repetition. While this is an obvious trope that is used in essentially every song. With a repeating chorus. I’ve never really wrote my lyrics outside of choruses using repetition. In the lyrics I’ve wrote for this module, there’s a line that’s repeated 3 times for the 2 times it comes up in the song. The line is “Please stay with me my inevitable”. I really liked this line, and I found it to be really impactful. So much so, that I felt like the song itself would benefit from having this section repeated.
Here are the lyrics in full that I wrote:
Well I see you lying there,
The tide rolls in and takes you away.
An ambience left in the balance.
Tonight (extended) we lay in the clouds.
Delving deeper into my mind.
Pre chorus
Lonely nights on the peer,
I can only wish you felt so endeared.
Lookin in those eyes, a pale canvas with no near soul to touch.
CHORUS
The world is not for you and me,
The stars don’t align, why won’t you be mine,
The sleepless nights left dwelling in the dark.
Please stay with me, my inevitable. (X3)
Verse2
Walking down the alleyway,
Brisk cut of the night.
Filling ever black into the dusk.
Day turns night,
Everlasting fight.
Pre chorus
Lonely nights on the peer,
I can only wish you felt so endeared.
Lookin in those eyes, a pale canvas with no near soul to touch.
CHORUS
The world is not for you and me,
The stars don’t align, why won’t you be mine,
The sleepless nights left dwelling in the dark.
Please stay with me, my inevitable. (X3)
I believe that they could have some improvement done to them, but as a base I’m very happy with them.
Haydn Brine - Musician 